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Spiritual Stones page29 scketch..
If there is something of wrong in characters' lines. Please let me know right English. ^^
Thank you. ^^
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xXfireandicexX Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009
Well, since you alredy posted this one, I won't fix anything ^^' Sorry I couldn't help.
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Don't worry. And thank you! ^^
I've always uploaded sketch in the scrap like this. :3
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xXfireandicexX Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009
okay ^-^ Have you been working on the next page? Anytime ^//^
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! *bow* ^_^
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xXfireandicexX Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009
*blushes and pulls back up* Oh no you don't! I should be doing the bowing
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^o^
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xXfireandicexX Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2009
^///^ <3
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SirWongIII Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Instead of "I have he hunch he'll do something wrong" perhaps it should be "I have a hunch he's going to do something wrong." It's up to you, however.
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! I will correct it at once! XD
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SpecterRenegades Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008
"I'll tell you ALL about it....

^^
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! I will correct it at once! ^^
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zetina Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Uh-huh. To tell you the truth, we - keepers of the Spiritual Stones - must never let outsiders know about the Sanctuary of the Stones. It's between you and me we're here. All right?"

I think you should leave the "yeah..." as it is because it shows that he is thoughtful/amazed. :3

"Of course! I'll tell you how when we get to the stones."

What does Izuna mean in the last speech bubble?
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you. :]

Last panel?
"look" "listen" "say" "now look" etc... I guess.
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zetina Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
He's really telling him to wait? o:
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No. Hm... or "come on".
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zetina Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah! Then it should be "Hey! Hurry up!" :3
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ShadowCatsKey Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oooh, very good here! Very good! I don't think there are as many errors as Wildstorm-Of-Skyclan says.

"But why would Izuna want to approach the Spiritual Stones?" <-"Want to" makes it sound more serious. "Wanna" would be playful or joking around ^^

"A cave...?" <- The "a" makes it sound... I don't know. more correct in the ears of native speakers.

"To tell the truth, We - The keepers of the Spiritual Stones - should never let outsiders know the location of the Saintuary of the Stones. This is between you and me- okay? Don't tell anyone we were here."

"Alright."
<-This would be better than "yeah", because "yeah" would make someone sound a little unsure as to what he is doing.

I agree with Wildstorm's last three suggestions.

"so, would you tell me HOW THE spirutial stones Are GOING TO MAKE MY WISH COME TRUE?". That sounds right.
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much for concrete advice as always! XD
I'm correcting them now. (^_^)ノ
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ShadowCatsKey Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry, it cut off the end of my last message...

...i'll tell you about IT when... <-sounds good, too.

"Stay here- I won't be long" should be a bit better ^^
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It means "That sounds right"?

I see. ^_^
Thank you again! :D
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wanna = want to
approatch THE spirutal stones...
A cave?
to tell YOU the truth...
never let outsiders know WHERE the sanctuary of the stones IS...
between you and me THAT we're HERE NOW...
so, would you tell me HOW THE spirutial stones Are GOING TO MAKE MY WISH COME TRUE?
...i'll tell you about IT when...
STAY, I WONT BE LONG.(I guess, but I'm not sure it's what you meant...)
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SheltieWolf Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! :D
I will correct them at once! (^_^)ノ
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